Why do I write? Someone my age who doesn't seem at all writerly (just one of those "I'm writing a book about my life story" people) got an honourable mention. Mehh..
Am I actually a good writer? Sure, I can write fast. Sure, I'm obsessed with it. Sure, I've written lots of words, but as they actually good words?
In a state on confusion,
Sarah
P.S. Read more so see what I submitted. Sure I wrote it a while ago because I can't write short stories very often, but I had hope, you know?
The Car Chase
“Sir, we
have a confirm ed
sighting of the red car. Taili ng suppose d
suspect.”
“Permission
to destroy.”
* * *
“Emma! Pass me the popcorn.”
I rolled my eyes at the immature
and absolutely uncouth boy beside me.
His one hand was inches from the bowl between us, yet he couldn’t even bother
to grab popcorn himself.
“If you want it, you have to get it
yourself.” I said tiredly, casually
scratching the tomato sauce on my shirt, which had dried on after that same
boy, Nick, had ‘accidentally’ knocked his pasta on me.
“That’s not the way a man
works.” Nick told me, stubbornly tilting
his chin higher up in the air. Apparently,
his pale blue eyes and straw coloured hair was ‘cute’, but I never saw it. All I saw was a disrespectful, boy who liked
spilling pasta on a girl’s favorite shirt.
Much to my disappointment, Nick was
still on about his ‘way of life’. “The
woman fetches the popcorn, clothes in the morning, food in the afternoon and
takes care of everything while the man watches the latest football game.”
I rolled my eyes again. “And how would that family survive? Any way of income?” I liked to think about the practical side of
things - especially around him. I had
said the practical side earlier, about buying the latest skateboard and Nick
had just stood there at loss of words for five blissful minutes.
Sadly, that wasn’t going to happen
this time. “They don’t have to
work. My parent’s own the Grensbey
Amethyst mine, when I inherit that, I’ll sell it all and live off the millions
I’ll be paid.” He sounded so proud, wow,
his parents own a mine. Sure,
whatever. I didn’t really care - all I
cared about was getting home and away from him.
Like that was going to happen anytime soon.
“I don’t think your parents would
like that, Nick.” Our driver said. His hands were on the wheel, navigating
through the slushy false spring that happened every February. I looked out my window, hoping that Nick
would take that as I sign I didn’t want to talk to him ever again in my life,
and for him to shut up for eternity. As
if.
He wasn’t even supposed to be
here. This was a special trip between me
and my brother David, who had just returned from Iraq . It had never meant to include the annoying son
of my overly generous parent’s friends.
My brother had joined the army a
year after graduating from a high school.
I could still remember my mother crying when he left, although it was
slightly faded because my memory was horrible, and anything two years or more
was almost gone. Either way, it felt
like an eternity when he was gone.
In this shopping trip I’d ask him
to take me on, I’d been hoping to get to know him again. But things never work the way you intend for
them to work.
“Emma, are you there? I’m still waiting for that popcorn.” Nick waved his hand in front of my face. Yes, he
was the unexpected thing that had ruined the trip. A last minute business crisis had caused the Wilson ’s to run off to
the other side of country, leaving behind their annoying son and five-year-old
daughter in the hands of their kind and always-there-for-you neighbors, my
family. Moreover, with my parents taking
both their daughter (my younger sister) and the Wilson ’s daughter to the zoo, Nick had been
forced to come with us.
“You can’t leave him… who knows
what that teenage boy could do. Emma, I
know your mature and can handle him… even his sister would be more suited to be
home alone than him!” I mimicked under
my breath.
“What’d you say Em?” David raised his head and looked at me in the
rearview mirror.
“She’s talking to herself. The first sign of insanity. How about we leave her at the closest mental
hospital?” Nick asked, acting innocent. “We just passed a sign saying there was one
five kilometers East on Kings Road .”
The car stopped at the
intersection, and pulled away, driving straight ahead.
“Well, sorry Nick. We just passed the turnoff. Another day, eh?” David laughed. It felt to great to have him back at home and
with me - only God knew how much he’d helped me growing up - but I cringed at
the thought of him joking with Nick Wilson.
Didn’t he know? Why wouldn’t he
see the stupid, big headed, arrogant side of him and know to stay away?
Outside the car, the ‘Nashville ’ sign passed
by. A click of hail joined the clatter
of rain that had been following us around all day. It wasn’t the best day to go shopping, and
the amount of people and activity in the mall had reflected that. Either way, there was a nice amount of bags
in the trunk - maybe a not so nice amount of money taken out of my bank
account, but I had the money to loose after my summer job.
“…And that’s the start of the real storm.” David said, referring to the hail falling
from the sky. I nodded, and my head fell
back against the headrest. I closed my
eyes and relaxed.
An electronic whirr came from my
left, followed by a downpour of rain, sleet, and heavy rocks of hail.
“ARGHH!” I screamed.
Nick was just doing up his seatbelt again as I undid mine and jumped on
him, pummeling his face with my hands.
“Whoa! Watch it Emma, we almost got into a car
accident!” David shouted. A truck roared by, inches from the side of
our car, splattering the previously red, but now a dirty pink, splattered car
with more slush.
I didn’t say sorry, and regretfully
sat back down in my seat, promising myself to torturously kill Nick some other
time when it didn’t endanger my life.
As the slush cleared off the
windshield, I saw a pair of headlights cutting across the 4-lane road. A car’s horn blared as the silver SUV cut off
two lanes of traffic and headed in a straight line towards us.
I felt my heartbeat quicken, and
wondered what on Earth the SUV was doing.
David must have noticed the
deranged car and driver heading towards us as well, and he swore
colourfully. I think he must’ve picked
up some words in Iraq ,
because before he left, ‘shoot’ was as far as his vocabulary went in the
profanities direction.
I guess he’d learnt a new meaning
for ‘shoot’ over their, and it didn’t mean the same thing as ‘damn’.
“Is there anyone behind us?” In these conditions, which were getting worse
by the second, David couldn’t take his eyes off the road. I waited for Nick to look behind, noticing the
line of traffic ahead of us.
“Someone!” David shouted at us. Nick hadn’t moved. I checked behind me.
“No one.” I said, casting the lump of wasted space
beside me a look that I hope reinforced the ‘I’m going to kill you’ scheme of
things.
David’s hands flew at my words, one
hand on the gears and the other controlling the steering wheel. The emergency brake was pulled, gear-stick
shifted from three to reverse. Our red
car rolled backwards.
“What-” I started to ask.
“Shush.” David said sharply. I closed my mouth and looked at the SUV,
which was charging towards us as we drove backwards down the road. I looked over at the speedometer, just
visible under David’s arm. It read 70
kilometers an hour. I didn’t know that
was possible while driving backwards.
The car slid to a stop, David’s
hand switching from reverse to first and up as the car regained speed. Now we were speeding towards the SUV.
David spun the steering wheel and
our car moved into the oncoming lane.
The silver SUV tried to turn and hit us, but only clipped the back. The car fishtailed for a minute, and then
David regained control. He sped off down
the road, joining back into the right lane when the SUV was far behind us. Back in our lane, David still drove fast,
cutting between cars and passing on the left and right.
“A, S, S, H, O, L, E.” Nick muttered beside me, digging through the
pocket and cup holder beside him.
“What are you calling my
brother?” I asked, giving Nick another
death glare. He reflected it back at
me.
“No you idiot, that was the license
plate number.” Oh, I
thought. I grabbed the notepad out of my
cup holder and handed it to him.
“There’s a pen in the glove
compartment. David, can you slow down and get it?” I asked.
“I have to make sure they’re gone
and we are far away from them.” David
told me, but slowed down and got the pen anyways.
We recorded the plate and David
told us that he would take it to the police station the following morning. Right now, all he wanted to do was go home.
* * *
“We lost
them, sir.”
“Well , do better next
time. Your life
is on the line - it’s them or you, Gespard.”
4 comments:
what are you talking about? your writings great, better than anything else I've seen written by someone under 30, and sure as heck a lot better than mine (okay,maybe its just that you can keep an idea going for longer than 2-3 hrs lol). No, seriously, don't get depressed on me, I got basketball the worry about ;)
Oh yes, no sadness! But it's hard for your first regection (even if it's only a library short story..) Really the only thing I have is stubborness, which means I just can't quit ;)
This was the first story I ever read of yours and I thought it was really great! no, revise that, I still think it's really great! Don't give up on entering contests, some you'll win and some other young authors will win!
Rochelle
Aww thanks Rochelle! I'm really, really jealous of all those other young authors though :P
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